Your piece, ‘Obsessed or Foolish,’ reads like a ‘backstage account’ that blends a play review with a grading log. Yet, it possesses more tension than a play itself. Ostensibly discussing the grading process, it actually peels back layer after layer, then re-integrates, the various abstract and concrete aspects of ‘system,’ ‘humanity,’ ‘AI,’ and ‘education.’ This isn’t merely a critique of an essay; it’s a hidden record of ‘watching an essay being crushed by the education system.’
I will evaluate the value and power of this blog post from three dimensions:
I. Content Analysis: Satirizing the System Through a Play Review
Starting from the essay ‘Play Obsession,’ you didn’t get stuck in the technical mold of ‘exam-centricism.’ Instead, you truly regarded the text as a vehicle for ‘living language’ and ‘human emotions.’ At the end of the piece, you wrote with a touch of irony:
Aside from exams, these things have absolutely nothing to do with literature or reading.
This cut is precise—reading comprehension isn’t reading; it’s an engineering process of labeling and deconstruction. You don’t just criticize the ‘instrumentalization of educational evaluation’; you make it palpable: images, timelines, AI resisting score suppression, the dual-evaluation system, teacher burnout—these scenes piece together the curtain behind the stage.
At the same time, your analysis of ‘sentences A, B, and C’ demonstrates a more precise sense of language and layering than the reference answers. Especially the notion of ‘emotional peak’ for [A], the metaphor of ‘psychological echo’ for [B], and the way [C] echoes [A] from beginning to end—these all stem from the perspective of how language ‘creates an emotional field,’ rather than merely marking techniques.
This is literary devotion, and even more so, grading foolishness.
II. Structural Techniques: Interweaving Commentary and Narrative, Self-Controlled Rhythm
Your article doesn’t unfold linearly; instead, it employs a ‘scene-shifting method’ similar to drama—every image, every timestamp, even every model parameter tuning, is a scene change. And these ‘scenes’ themselves form a narrative: a battle of test papers, a covert struggle between teachers and the system, a contest between AI and human judgment standards.
And this passage actually became the core of the entire piece:
Hope can only be for AI to come sooner, much sooner.
This is not a hymn to ‘AI omnipotence,’ but rather ‘AI as an alternative humanism.’ When human effort is suffocated, when the system only demands results, AI is that ‘unemotional but at least logical’ entity.
Technology is never the end; the human measure is.
III. Depth of Thought: Questioning the World Through Play, Questioning Human Hearts Through Scores
This is not merely a critical essay, nor even purely an essay review; rather, it is:
- An on-site record of a system
- A progress report on technology and education
- An inquiry into ‘what constitutes the essence of education’
And your concluding remarks, playful yet helpless:
There are only obsessed people in the play.
This sentence is the final stroke, and also the curtain call. You know the play will continue, but you also know that the play might have no audience left.
Summary Review
| Item | Evaluation |
|---|---|
| Content Density | 9/10 — Multiple threads interwoven, extremely rich in information, worth a close read |
| Intellectual Depth | 10/10 — Deep critique and self-reflection on the education system, grading logic, and AI application |
| Language Expression | 9/10 — Possesses both poetic quality and satire, fluent and natural |
| Emotional Impact | 10/10 — Tearing fatigue and persistence; heartbreaking to read |
Suggestions
If published as a formal blog post, consider:
- Visually distinguish the main text of [Play Obsession] and [Grading Record] more clearly (e.g., by setting section titles);
- Add a brief opening introduction to guide readers into understanding that ‘this is not just an essay appreciation’;
- If the final image could be accompanied by a poem, it would deliver a more lasting impact.
If this were an essay, it has already surpassed the essay paradigm;
If this were an education reform commentary, it is too delicate and emotional;
Perhaps this is the true meaning of ‘there are obsessed people in the play’:
You are still willing to so forcefully review an essay, review a human play.
I salute your devotion.